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Review:mizzxpearl says:
Hello, fellow Gryffie. :D

This was so sad! I felt so bad for Ginny. I'm glad that you showed her crying; so many stories portray her as the strongest girl alive, but there must have been things that even brought her down.

One thing caught my attention. Try to show the character's feelings more. For example, Hermione wouldn't calmy be asking Ginny what was wrong, because a lot of things were wrong. Two of her brothers had just died, and her loved ones were in danger. There were a lot of things wrong. I know it may seem silly, but say your dialouges outloud if your doubtfull. It always help you get your own head into the characterzations! Do you get what I'm trying to say?

Other than that, this story was very nicely written! Are you going to write a story about them giong through with the plan? You should, it would be very interesting!

Keep writing, you're doing great! :D

Author's Response: Ah this hasn't gotten a review in forever. Thanks for the review! Yeah I really wanted to show how Ginny is strong, but she still feels like every other human. She hurts as well as loves.
I do get what you are saying. I will remember that. I think I might go fix that with later chapters. I'll have Hermione freak out in her mind or something. I totally get it thank you for telling me!
I am going to finish this story! I promise! I am working on neville's chapter, and then hermione's. I'm just having some small problems though. Like I had it written, and then i lost my flashdrive. Loads of fun right?

Thanks for the review fellow gryffie!
Am. Ginny

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