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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
It is a funny chapter, especially with the brawl scene. Louis's jealousy had to get him into trouble one day, and of course the whole thing with Charlie entirely backfired, but that seems to be the normal thing with Louis - just bad luck all round. It was great to see how Louis and Annah reacted against the Muggles and their technology - that interaction between wizard-muggle doesn't come up all that often, and you handled it so smoothly and perfectly.

Yes, yes, hear the seething jealousy of my own popping through. Will try to restrain it, at least until I finish writing this.

I do understand what you said about not liking this chapter as much, though I liked it fine, since it's more pushing your plot along in the second half, and plot movement can take away from humour (it's the practicality of it, I guess). However, it was pretty funny that Dom couldn't remember a simple name that rhymed with her own.

I'm curious about what Dom did do for the sake of her coup, since she doesn't seem the type who makes mistakes in her work (relationships = entirely different matter), or would do something that could blow up in her face. Cliffhangers, bah! Fun to write. Evil to read. :P

Author's Response: Oh it totally did. Was never going to end well for him, although to be fair he did rather come out on top! As for things not working out with Charlie, at least they went quite well with Annah, so balanced out okay for him?
As for the wizard-muggle interaction, it's interesting. I always thought the Next-Gen kids would be much better integrated with the muggle world than their parents. Really though, even in canon we hardly see wizard-muggle stuff so there's a fair bit of scope to play with.

Oh don't be ridiculous! You're actually just like... the best!

Blahh plot. I actually struggle to drag the plot along without slowing things down quite a lot. Definitely something that I need to work on.

Haha well I won't say too much about it then. You're right though, really doesn't seem very likely :P Thank you so much for all these reviews! They've been so encouraging and insightful, just wanted you to know I really do appreciate you taking the time!

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