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Review:Capella Black says:
Ooh, this is a really great concept for a story! I'd never given much thought as to how Malfoy and Myrtle ended up as confidants, but this really worked. Myrtle is exactly the type to spy on someone and then wheedle the truth out of them, and Malfoy would undoubtedly have been close to cracking, and so easy to break.

I liked the style at the start too, as introspection broke way for outer dialogue, thus setting the scene for Myrtle's eventual entrance. The only thing that might do with tweaking is the way these thoughts became a bit repetitive towards the end. I realise that it's more realistic that way, as people do tend to be repetitive when they worry, but perhaps extending the theme, with new details or further catastrophising, would make it even more compelling.

Still, the dialogue was very in character, and the whole justifying section at the end was brilliant. Really nice piece, and original too.

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