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Review:Lady Kyra says:
I certainly enjoyed this very fluffy piece. Again, it is an excellent contrast from the other three one-shots of yours I have read. You are versatile in your writing, which is always an excellent skill to have.

I liked the light, airy quality of this story. It is just so innocent: the two lovers, both still young and passionate, and the idea of happiness and fun. I enjoyed the descriptions present, particularly how you weaved their physical descriptions into a statement of how well they fit together instead of just putting them out there. The story itself makes you feel the spontaneity, the innocence, and the happiness that the characters are going through simply by the style of writing, which I imagine is difficult to achieve.

The characterizations were cute and interesting. I like the idea of Teddy as the fun-loving, spontaneous one who wants to be happy. I can imagine that as the son of a Marauder and Tonks and one who lost both his parents, he would understand the importance of going after happiness rather than waiting for it to fall in your lap. Victorie was also good as the voice of reason who still manages to get caught up in Teddy's enthusiasm. You can tell that she is struggling with her well-intentioned, reasonable side and the side of her that is young, in love, and ready for adventure. It provides an interesting contrast and gives the character that much more depth.

I particularly enjoyed the length of this story. I thought that you ended it at the perfect place; it leaves the reader to imagine where they are going, the adventure they are going on, the trouble they will get into with their parents. It gives the reader plenty to think about, which is what any good story does. Overall, a brilliant piece.

Grammar was, again, good, though as a quick note you noted that this story was for the " Picture is Worth a Thousand Worfs Challenge," when I do believe you meant "Words". Just something that I noted and thought I would mention.

I hope this review helps you in some way!

Author's Response: Versatile? That's a word that'll make me happy! I'm glad you think so.

That's definitely the spirit that I wanted to capture with this. I wanted it to be kind of whimsical and romantic and, well, completely fluffy. Not much angsty drama in this one, haha.

I'm pleased you like the characterizations! If I can toot my own horn a little, I really love the way I characterized Teddy and Victoire in this, so I'm glad I'm not the only one who thinks so, haha.

The length is, actually, 1000 words on the dot (without Author's Notes). But I didn't struggle much to get there even though I did like the idea since it's the Picture is Worth a Thousand Words Challenge. It was the right place to end.

Whoops. That's a funny typo. I'll have to go back and fix that, hehe.

Thank you for the reviews. You're an absolute doll.


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