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Review:witch_in_training says:
Wow. This was dark. Disturbingly dark, really, but at the same time I had to keep going, just to know for sure how it all ended. Possibly the most frightening part is the desire and passion behind all the violence. That, more than the ending, was what gave me chills.

The descriptions were very well done (although in some place I feel I would've been better off if they weren't :P), with an almost poetic feel to some of the lines.

I'm not too sure about Draco's dialogue in some parts -- at times it just doesn't sound like him to me, when he's taunting Harry. Then again, I have no idea how old they are in this story, and so I have no idea how much time you imagined it took his character to reach this point. He's certainly darker than in canon, but things can change, of course.

I'm very sorry about the rambling quality of this review; it's 2:00 AM. If anything doesn't make sense, that's why.

Anyway, I applaud your ability to write something that genuinely makes me shudder, in a good way -- by now there's not much that will make me flinch back a little, unless it's something atrociously written, which of course this wasn't. :) I'm not entirely sure what to say, beyond that. :P This was a nice piece, and I liked the way "I Will Not Bow" was incorporated. Mostly because I love that song. xD

I should stop before I hurt myself. Goodnight!


Author's Response: I think I always manage to go a little over the top when writing my Draco/Harry stories! I think I go into darkangstyangry overload!

I agree that Draco is definitely darker than in canon, but I wanted to portray their relationship as one that had gotten so twisted that their personalities had almost warped with it.

In response to their age/ time it took to reach that point I have no idea! When I write one-shots I rarely think about events that happen other than the ones that are happening right there. I like to think of them as little moments in time that make no sense but deliver a dollop of emotion! It's not just me being lazy... haha, yes.

I love that song too! I'm also very pleased I made you shudder - in a good way :D - because I did want to create something dark and evil here! Don't worry about rambling! A good ramble is perfect in a review. :)

Thank you so much for reviewing this! Your review made me very pleased. :)

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