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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
It's weird, but a good weird. It's a very interesting piece - I can't even call it a story, it's too much artistic and poem-like - and I think it's brilliant. The metaphors in this are drool-worthy, making me melt at the second paragraph, and the repetition emphasized how song-like or poem-like this was. The whole piece sounds beautiful.

The characterization even works, with Snape almost breaking down in the line about the bus. I hit that line like a brick wall the first time, but it suits Snape's psychology, the deep-rooted bitterness and darkness within him. The last line makes me wonder if it's Harry he's talking about, though I don't know if he actually holds Snape's hand. That would be interesting as the only way Snape can come to terms with Lily's "enchantment" of him.

This story also provides a different way in looking at the Snape/Lily relationship because of how he's seduced by her and of the power she's able to hold over him. It's not sweet innocent unrequited love, it's something more lustful, particularly in the three ways he views her as darker, more malicious figures. It sheds a new light on Lily herself, as she's always held up as good.

You've made me think too much. :P That in itself is dangerous.

Thank you very much for posting this story! It's really something special. ^_^

Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the awesome review, Susan!

I've written my share of innocently pining Snape before, but I wanted to dig deeper and tap into the bitterness and cynicism and anger that I think is much more in character for him. And as you pointed out, Lily is a much darker figure in this interpretation - a tease in a very dark way. It doesn't even necessarily mean that Lily WAS doing anything wrong - just that Snape, in his bitterness and anger, probably could have convinced himself that she was being twisted and malicious in stringing him along. Does that make sense? This is a much more bitter view of Lily from Snape's POV than most people write about, and I really liked exploring it.

I don't know whether the child at the end is Harry - I just really liked that line and liked how vague it was. I don't think Harry takes Snape's hand either, but that line could easily be interpreted as that scene in DH. Or maybe the child is some more innocent incarnation of Lily in Snape's mind? Who knows? I sure don't. XD

Thanks again for the review! I wasn't too sure about posting this piece at first, but I'm glad it made you think and got such a great response from you!


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