Hi, it's boysof_p0tterfan509 from the forums with the review I've promised :)
First, I would like to say thank you for taking on my challenge, and although you were two words shy of 1,000, I still think you did a beautiful job writing this. The description flowed quite nicely, every feeling sort of blending in to the next. I could really feel how Rowena was feeling here, how unafraid of death she was and, in her last moments, how much her body wanted to hold on to that last bit of love for as long as she could. I thought that the way you had Godric interact with Rowena was gentle, though at his first line it seemed he hadn't realized yet that Rowena was dying, but rather thought it had been an accident, almost? But then he was crying, so maybe he had realized it and didn't want to sound too mournful? Whatever the case, I thought that you adapted the picture provided into words very well.
Thanks again for giving the challenge a go :)
Author's Response: Haha, my word processor told me it was 1,000 words, and hpff clearly thinks it's 998. I'm not going to stress, but perhaps I'll add two more, to make it official.
I'm very pleased you like my description! It's as far from a strongpoint as you can get, and much closer to a weakness. No, it IS a weakness. So I'm glad you liked it in this story. :D It was also written all in one sitting, so I didn't even stress over it as I normally do.
The way I pictured the dialogue was this: Godric appeared, and assumed Rowena was dead. He was shaken, but she can't see that and thus the fact doesn't appear in the narrative. He tried to keep cool, telling her what had happened (I also needed a way to explain it had been an accident by a student, probably in DADA class) and once he got a hold of himself, felt for a pulse. He found none, and once more tried to hold it together, and say some nice words over his friend's body. However, as you can see, a few tears were shed. So the whole time he thought she was dead, but Rowena couldn't see the anguish he felt, and he had "proof" she was dead just before his long speech. Make sense?
Anyway, thanks for the quick review!