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Review:melian says:
Another lovely story. I thought you approached this really well and we certainly felt Dominique's pain through your words so you must have done a good job. It had just the right blend of description and angst, if that makes any sense, and I could really see what was happening.

My only comment would be that when you started talking about all being well in the Weasley family you dropped back to past tense, and it didn't sit well in the narrative. I think that if you made it all present tense it would feel smoother and also be more consistent.

Good job!

cheers, Mel

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your helpful feedback! I'm really glad you enjoyed this. When writing it that particular paragraph really got on my nerves and I didn't know what to do about it, I switched it around so many times. I think I finally sought guidance from someone else and went with what they advised, but thank you for adding your opinion. No doubt I'll go back and edit all of my fan fictions to death one day and I'll definately take that into consideration when I do! I wouldn't want to break the flow.

Your reviews have been so helpful and sweet! I'm sure your being much kinder than I deserve, but I'm not complaining ;) Thank you so much Mel, I owe you a million!

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