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Review:MonoxideLullaby says:
I like this so far I'm definitely going to continue to the next chapter but you came to me for the critic in me hah so here we go,
it's a little confusing when you switch from Rowena to Draco I'd recommend doing something like this:

Draco's POV

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Rowena's POV
Don't actually put their names haha, just the divide would help catch on faster instead of needing to see the name to know who's thinking it.

And just some minor things, major pet peeve of mine is when people mix up your and you're haha, " “what I couldn’t take is if something happened to you. Your all I have left”" There was also a mix up of their and there but only the 2 so it's not a big deal (:
also, at the end of a lot of them talking there's no periods so they finish talking and it looks like this"

other than that I really like it (: very minor criticism I'm liking this a lot so far (: on to the next one

I was also wondering about the winged comment? I'm sure you'll explain it more but it has me thinking of freaky wings growing out her back haha.

-Missy

Author's Response: Thank you for your honesty and your critque. I am working on seperating their POV's and will watch my grammer bette in the future.. She does have very light wings, but she hides them.. she'll reveal them later in the story

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