I was praying that you would begin the sequel to TwoHawksHunting (that series is my favorite forever!!!), and when I found thiat this had come out, I was deeply moved as well.
Poor, poor Severus!
So this is an extended version of Broken Wings Chapter XV...
Yes, suicide is indeed a hard subject to tackle, but I hope you are assured by my saying that you have done a WONDERFUL job in writing all the feelings, etc.
Yes, one's life is very precious, we should all bear that in mind.
And yet, -I do hope you are not offended by this- inside the literature structure, suicide can have a very special impact. I wonder if Lao She's play Teahouse ever had the chance to show in theatres in your country? (in 1980 it went over to France, West Germany and Switzerland, with a huge success, how they all managed to understand Chinese I would never know) In the end, Wang Lifa, the owner, hung himself, (the teahouse, his life's work, had been forcefully confiscated bu the Kuomintang) but it doesn't necessary mean a coward's way out, instead it was a final, powerful accuse to a dark and corrupt society, which was about to come to an end.
If possible, you can buy an English version of the play and take a look. Unlike Shakespere, it doesn't even have a central story, but it takes you back all the way to 1898-1948 Beijing, as vividly as it can be.
(Sadly, Lao She died in 1966 because of wrongful persecution by the "Cultural Revolution". He drowned himself in a lake. To this day my mother and I still argue about whether or not he was a coward in the end. He was nominated Nobel Prize for Literature in 1968, after finding out he had passed away, it went to Kawabata Yasunari)