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Review:Maybe says:
How strange; I clicked on the Recently Added List and what should come up first but 'The Fluidity of a Stone'? :D
Hehe, that last part made me chuckle, poor Collette. So I really like the concept of this and look forward to reading more; though there has been little of her friends thus far I think you've characterised them well - Rose reminds me of one of my friends! Collette seems suitably contemplative and sad but at the same time able to laugh and make jokes which is a good thing.
I did notice quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes but they can easily be rectified, of course. One thing I'd recommend you work on is sentence structure as for the most part they are short and this makes the overall chapter a little jolty and it doesn't flow as well as it could. Some of the sentences could be merged into one as it's better with varying sentence lengths.
Other than those technical points I like your characters and I think this story could really go somewhere.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'll try to get a beta as soon as I can, but don't know if it will be fixed before the que closer.

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