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Review:confusedlover says:
very lovely.

wonderful job on this! Draco Malfoy? to be honest, i wanted to think he'd be the one but i wasn't sure. it should definitely make this story a lot more interesting if you ask me! this whole god thing still hasn't sunk in yet but i'm sure it will soon enough. the only thing that really didn't work for me was the fact that Lily seemed to hate Draco at the beginning of this chapter and then by the middle and end she was talking about how he really wasn't supporting Voldemort and was only wanting to keep his mother safe and alive. i don't know...it just didn't seem to work. maybe i'm looking too much into this and all but it just sort of seemed to me like she had no reason to hate Draco yet at the beginning she seemed to so much.

other than that one thing, i really had nothing to complain about with this chapter. as i have mentioned many times before, i believe this story can go pretty much anywhere and am excited to see just where you take things. oh, and another thing you might be pleased to hear! your flow, from the start, has always been done pretty well. you rush a few times here and there but for the most part you have tamed it quite well. it has improved a ton since the first chapter of this story that i read, which is incredible. the few changes that take place throughout each chapter have really added up it seems and i definitely am a fan of your flow right now. certainly the best i have seen it yet.

also, your characters have been doing very well. you are doing a marvelous job of holding your characters together and not changing who they are and what they say for the most part. the thing with Lily in this chapter was the only place i have really seen a contradiction with the characters you have presented in these first four chapters and that is another thing you should be extremely proud of. with such little contradiction, you are making a lot of sense to your readers. plus, with not doing a lot of it in the first four chapters, it lessens your changes later on in this story.

overall, i am very impressed with this chapter. like the previous ones, a lot of information but that part will end soon, i am sure. the set-up is still on process and once that part of this story is all done with you will really have the time and resources to grow and expand your plot and characters. i honestly am very eager to see that part of this story. this is off to an amazing start but once things really get set in motion i have a feeling i won't want to stop reading this.

i wish you the a very great day and hope to see another request from you soon on my review thread. keep up the amazing work!

Author's Response: Thank you again for such a great review. In regards to Lily's character the idea was that she hates Draco so much because of how he acts and how he has treated Harry and the others in the past, though I guess I probably should have mentioned that and not left it up to interpretation. You also find out later on that she has a problem with his personality in general as well and she just doesn't like him on principal for the most part. But thank you I should go back and fix that so that it is more obvious why Lily hates Draco so much even though he isn't truly a Death Eater.

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