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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
Hey, here to review ch. 2 as requested. I really liked the description in this chapter, it flows well and almost seems like poetry the way you've described things in such a rich detail without giving too much away. And the characters that Sirius has met so far seem well defined and the dialogue seems to flow well with the description, to keep the story moving from point a to point b and so forth.

I really like how you've stuck with Sirius's characterisation from what we know and how he may act once they reached the Watching Room and he saw himself fall through the veil, all the way up to Epiphanites telling him that he's dead like they are. I actually felt myself tearing up as he watched that spell come at him and knock him backward into the veil all over again, it hit me fresh like it always does anytime I reread OotP. Over all, great chapter and feel free to come back when you've updated. 10/10

Author's Response: Hey Leslie! Thanks for the lovely review, and so sorry for the ghastly wait on this response.

I'm so glad the description's alright! I was concerned about keeping things a bit whimsical and dreamlike, quite like Epiphany itself really, so it's fantastic to hear that I did okay on that. Also totally happy that flow is alright too, I'm weirdly paranoid about that! XD

Oh, thank goodness! Sirius is my favorite, so I was terrified about butchering his characterization. The fact that I've stayed true to how he was portrayed in the first chapter is fantastic to hear!

Awww! Well, as sorry as I am that it made you tear up, I'm glad that it resonated with you! That scene was rather daunting to write, as it's quite the pivotal moment in the series and I bawled like crazy at that point in OotP as well. I felt such sadness when I was writing it, really, as I'd love nothing more than Sirius to be alive and well!

Thanks so much for the review, lovely! I appreciate it so much.

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