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Review:silver ink says:
Hello, silverink from the forums here with your review :) Oh gosh, I'm so sorry it's taken me so long to get here-- it seems like you requested ages ago.

Okay, I'm going to do a critique first and then praise:
Critique:
I didn't notice any blatant grammatical errors, so good for you :) Although I did notice the word "smilged" and I assume that was mosl likely a typo. That can be easily fixed, though.

So, I had this strange feeling that something is missing in this. I can't really explain it, but I feel like there should be... more. Like, I didn't get a clear image in my head of what their surroundings were or a good idea of imagery. I don't know if you meant to do that or not, because some authors do; I'm just one of those readers that really loves imagery. A lot. And I didn't get any here. Which is well and good, but it could perhaps be something to bear in mind...?

Praise: (yay my favourite part)
THIS IDEA IS AWESOME. Yeah. That had to be capitalized for extreme emphasis. It's so super original and mysterious and not your average Sirius/OC :D It's really strange too, and I adore strange things. This story pulls the reader in because they'll obviously want to know what happens-- who wouldn't want to read on after this? The fact that he knows absolutely nothing about Epiphany is glorious. The thought of this type of world liek Epiphany is vaguely familiar to me, like something similar to this has been written or filmed before, but that doesn't matter because you've added your own original flair to it. Also, the characterization of the girl was fabulous. Woo hoo!

This is off to a superb start, and now I'll see you in the next chapter! :D

-silver ink

Author's Response: Hello! Oh no, don't worry about time at all, I'm really not fussed. :)

As for critique - wow, thanks for bringing that whole imagery issue to my attention! Like you, I'm absolutely imagery-driven, and I was really hoping that I got a clear picture of Epiphany into the readers mind. I'll take a look into future chapters to make sure everything can be clearly seen in the reader's eyes.

Woohoo, praise! :P Ah, thank you darling! This is my first real departure from the classic Potterverse that we know so well, so I'm glad that the idea of this isn't totally out there and hard to take an interest in. Oh, places like Epiphany have definitely been touched upon in pop culture, but the great thing about them is that you can twist them about and make them your own ;)

Thank you so much for the review, I appreciate it tons!


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