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Review:helena7654 says:
Hi... good start to the story.

I don't think you need to worry about dialogue, I could follow pretty easily, and it was written well.

One thing that I felt like I needed to point out ... when you get butterflies in your stomach, well that IS feeling nervous, they are one and the same... anyway I guess people interpret sayings in different ways.

Also, as this is your introductory chapter I'm just gonna assume that in your following chapters is where you're gonna go into more detail about why Hermione isn't satisfied with Ron or why she can't talk to him about stuff...if not then I guess maybe you should think about doing that?

Other then that, good start! xx

Author's Response: I do plan on writing a follow up. I just wanted to get some feedback so I could improve on it before posting more to the story.

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