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Review:TallestTower says:
Hey there! It's Broomsticks from the forums again with your review. :)

I thought the beginning was a little confusing. Just to check, did they suddenly get called on another mission, have their memory wiped and then get placed back? But other than that the rest of the chapter was clear and detailed!

The Kendra/Doyle moment was so sweet - even if they have to show off a little bit. Honestly, I do love those two.

This chapter was much more dramatic and dark. The way they have their memories wiped is horrible - and the fight with the two Men was really horrific. I thought the walk down the street was very eerie, and you built the suspense well.

I thought that the man may have not used Sectumsempara because that was a spell that Snape invented and was probably not well known - but that's just what I think, it's not canon or anything... I mean, it could have easily spread. The fight was really good and tense, and very creepy when that man is trying to lure her out.

- Description

The description was great and I thought you built the atmosphere brilliantly.

- Characters

Kendra and Doyle were as Kendra and Doyley as ever, if that makes sense. It was interesting to see Kendra in a new situation, and it was quite funny that she decided to use the line "Be careful what you wish for" seeing as earlier on in the chapter she said she wanted to be "out there doing something." Oh the twists of fate haha.

I liked that the mysterious man had an accent, I thought that added good character.

- Character Development

It's so lovely to see Kendra and Doyle's relationship blossoming. They're really close to each other and I just want something to happen between them so bad! But of course, they're spies and partners... who keep having their memories wiped... a bit of an awkward relationship I suppose! To see Doyle caring for her was very sweet though.

- Dialogue

Was great again - very realistic, I can't write dialogue to save my life, so I'm in awe of you.

- Plot so far

There is still so much mystery and suspense in this story! It sucks you in and encourages you to read on. With each chapter I become more curious. It's brilliant, and I love seeing the plot develop.

- Grammar

Seemed perfect to me! I didn't notice anything.

Another great chapter. If I was to give you any CC it would just be to make sure that things don't get too confusing (but ovbiously, you gotta keep the mystery going!) otherwise it may put some people off. But otherwise, I have no CC. This was brilliant and a really enjoyable read! K and D are both very strong OCs and your writing always flows excellently.

Hope this review was helpful, feel free to re-request any time! :)

~ TallestTower

Author's Response: Wow. That was an overwhelmingly large review. And I'm sorry I haven't responded until now, but I need a little time to marinate on it. Yes, I am like a kind of steak.

Your guess about the beginning of the chapter was correct. It was like a mini-mission. Maybe I'll stick something in the dialogue about it.

Suspense is always a good thing. I'm happy that you thought I had some. I guess I dropped it in by accident. Oh well, sometimes life is serendipitous like that.

Kendra and Doyle being Kendra and Doyley is a good thing. Especially since I created them - I want them to be pretty consistently like themselves.

Ha! I never thought about how that line really does come full circle. Irony but not of the dramatic variety.

Oh! I forgot to talk about Sectumsepra. I think, and I'm not sure what other people will think about this, but I think that Severus would've told other Death Eaters about this, or they would've seen him use it. I just figured members of the inner circle would be aware of it.

I'm going to work on the confusing. It's just a little hard since I know everything about it - since I made it up. It's hard to know how much readers are able to piece together.

Thank you for the marvelous review! I really appreciate it.


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