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Review:JLHufflepuff says:
Wow! I don't think I've ever seen this pairing before, or if I have, it hasn't been done this well. Marauders era is not my favorite time period, but this has me greatly intrigued.

Your characterization so far paints a good picture. James is in typical form. I really can see him being hot-headed enough to start a duel over an insult. Lily seems to be what we know of her from canon but something more, also.

And Lucius ... I don't know that I've ever thought of him as being something squee-worthy, but in this chapter he comes pretty close! In this chapter, he's sort of just in a comical position because he's weakened, so he can't be all intimidating and sneering.

The one thing that isn't clear to me in the story is the age between Lucius and Lily. I'm no Marauders genius, but I think he WAS at Hogwarts with them for a while, only quite a bit older. Anyway, that's minor, but it could be brought out more. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this amazing review! Really, it just made my day!

This is a unique pairing, which is really why I wanted to write it. I know that Lucius turns out to be a complete bastard, but he was just a kid once like everyone else. But I won't say anymore because that might give it away!

I loved the idea of making Lucius weak because every other time we see him (except when he loses his wand to the Dark Lord) he's powerful with a strong stature and filled with pride. Nothing could bring him down. So it's a side of him we haven't really seen.

Ahh, as for the ages, I believe I made an Author's Note about it at the beginning of the chapter...but maybe it wasn't clear enough. Lucius is actually about 4 years older than the Marauders, et al. I made him younger (and Bella too, she's a couple years older than him even) so that the relationship would be plausible to occur during school. Otherwise she'd be a 3rd year and he a 7th and that just seems a bit odd to me (even if that's the exact same thing that happened between my fiance and I).

I think I'll make an official note of their age as to avoid any further confusion, so thank you for pointing that out.

This review really really made my day, so thank you so much!

-Dem-


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