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Review:Random Reader says:
Very nice conclusion. I have to admit though, i was a tiiiny bit dissapointed at how easy it all seemed. i was waiting for the classic twist, during harry and hermiones conversation, for harry to say something and trigger hermiones memory about something. particularly about the detail with how the girl was released from the asylum. i was expecting some sort of revelation that would indeed prove it was not natalie who did it, but it was someone else, and the the evidence pointed out just who it was.
dont know, just was expecting a little twist, or someone to die, or something drastic :P
definately a very good story though, im not sure if this is your first attempt at a mystery type deal, but its absouletly brilliant.

truly hope you keep writing stories, i dont usually read short stories, but now im seriously debating reading some of your short stories. its 4 am here now, and i can honestly say im quite satisfied with a night well spent. :)

Author's Response: i thought of a twist, even had a few in mind as i was writing the story. i had always intended to include one, but after a law and order svu marathon i realized something. sometimes the twist is redundant, sometimes it's forced... sometimes it simply doesn't mesh.

so in the end i wrote a chapter with a reveal with a twist and then this one and this simply had more quality so i had to go with it.

I HOPE YOU LIKE THE EPILOGUE AND CAN'T WAIT TO HEAR YOUR THOUGHTS ON THAT EXCERPT! thank you.

p.s. i officially dedicate that chapter to you, thank you!


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