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Review:dracos_babe says:
This is actually a really good story. I was skeptical going into it since it was written from Pansy's POV and I didn't really know what to expect. Your writing is absolutely exquisite. Your attention to detail is amazing, you really grasp the reader's attention and keep them hooked. I loved reading you writing it was so riveting and well done. A few things I noticed when reading were "he teased, lightly placing brushing the small of her back with his hand" which tripped me up at first and I assume should be "lightly brushing the small of her back" and not have the word placing in it. Also, "She'd rather plan my every movement on a day to day business" I believe the phrase is "a day to day basis" not business. Also a few typos here and there that really didn't interrupt the flow of the reading too much though, I might suggest another proofread but it wasn't anything horribly offending. I was a little concerned with Pansy's character at first, in HP we see her as very doting when it comes to Draco, smoothing his hair when he lays his head in her lap and other things like that, where as here she's quite stand offish when she's around him playing the Slytherin character a lot more. I like how you've written her though, secretly in awe of him and trying to stay calm, cool and collected when he and others are around, I think I prefer this personality of hers to JK's. I really can't express how much I love your writing though it's captivating and extremely well done and definitely makes for a good read.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the incredible feedback! I will go in and fix those typos straight away, I think it was just a case of changing my wording and forgetting to change the sentence properly. I love betas too much to subject one to my insanity, so I end up with some typos sometimes.

Pansy's character to me is a conflicted one. I completely agree with you, as far as the doting etc goes. I think I will be able to clear this up in the net few chapters; in my mind it is a case of perspective. Harry sees her doting on him and being absolutely devoted, while when we see it in her mind, it isn't a big deal- he's her best friend. Its completely casual, so from her perspective it doesn't come up. What does come up in her thoughts are more of her struggle to remain objective when really she's as subjective to him as can be. What really matters to her is what happens when others aren't looking.
Thank you so much for your help, I am really glad you enjoyed this!

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