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Review:BusinessJournal says:
Hello! BusinessJournal in with your reviews! First off, so sorry for the lateness of this review. My work schedule's been strangling me and my time. Anywho, enough about me ;)

I remember you saying you wanted your last few chapters reviewed which is why I'm starting here. I think this is such a cool idea for a story. I've read a few werewolf fics but never one as original and well-written as this one. Werewolf stories are usually not number one on my list (not sure why, I don't really have any problems with it!) but I'm glad you've requested this one. It's kind of giving me a new opinion on the whole thing ;). I love Devin. That's pretty much it. Ha ha. Especially in this chapter for some reason I love him a whole lot more now. It must be your characterization or something but it's great. I just found one little error:

"They'd entered this town, looking and for answers, and been chased out." - I don't think the "and" needs to be there between the "looking" and "for"? Maybe I'm just reading wrong, and if so that reads funny for sure.

Other than that I really don't have a lot to say, and no CC as this was very well-written. I should be getting to your last few chapters within the next few days ^_^

BusinessJournal

Author's Response: No problem about the lateness; review threads always come last on the to do list, at least on mine.

Thank you so much for reading all the way through to here, I know this story isn't most people's cup of tea. But it seems like you're enjoying it, and Devin. To be honest, up until this point of the story I had no plan going for me whatsoever, and Devin's character sprung up very suddenly. Nice to know he's turning out ok.

Yes, my grammatical mistakes usually involve me not deleting enough of a sentence I edited, or starting a thought and not finishing it. That "and" certainly doesn't need to be there. Thanks for the review!!!


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