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Review:DemetersChild says:
"Atkins also had the uncanny ability to appear out of nowhere and stare over her shoulder as she dealt with particularly precious or fragile records."

Haha, I liked this line. I could see a stern tall guy standing over her shoulder, frowning at her. Awesome.

You know what's so sad? Kendra and Doyle are super cute together...and when this mission is over they won't even remember it. :(

Since you didn't seem to be concerned with grammar, I'll just skip that bit and get to what you asked me to comment on. :D

Okay, well it is still very interesting. It's not as mysterious/mind-boggling as the first two chapters, but it's alright to have a seemingly "normal" chapter.

Obviously something else is up, what with the note/cliffhanger at the end. So you still have the reader questioning. These characters are still a mystery. Their past lives, missions, relationships are completely hidden, almost inaccessible.

Overall, I enjoyed this chapter even if it wasn't as...dense as the previous two. It flowed nicely. And you have a very nice touch with descriptions. The style is definitely something to be complimented. The fact that I'm not sure what makes it so unique makes it even better.

I'll let you know after the next chapter if it's really losing its mysteriousness, or not. ^^


Author's Response: Yeah, I needed for her boss to be a vaguely unpleasant guy. Not evil, mind, just unpleasant.

K and D are kind of tragic that way. But they do have the present.

Aww, shucks! That description comment made me melt a little bit. I've really been working on improving it, since my characters are spies and should therefore notice everything.

Also, good to see that I didn't lose you with the calm in this chapter. It needed to be done, though.

Thanks for the review!

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