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Review:nisalurve says:
Hm. I like your story, but despite that, well, this chapter is kind of off. Stories with Harry's sister don't normally tend to work. It could work if you changed a few things. Harry's reaction seems almost timed, it's so short and you don't get a glimpse inside of his head at all. I think it would take him at least a chapter of being upset at Remus and Sirius and ignoring this sister to be able to handle it. Also, you have several oneliners. I would join them into paragraphs or something of the like. I hope I wasn't too harsh, dear, your story isn't half as bad as I probably make it sound from this review!

Author's Response: I agree with you on Harry's reaction, but I didn't want to spend an entire chapter on Harry's reaction since there is a lot more to the story and the plot that needs to be said. I was going more for the effect that Harry was sort of stunned by the information and didn't really have much to say since there was so much for Lily and the others to say. I also feel like Harry is the kind of person that finding out that he has some sort of family he would be very eager to accept them because he has so little ties to his family.

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