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Review:DemetersChild says:
"Leftover was the term for memories the leaders of a team have of distributing orders."

This sentence is a bit confusing.

"Do you know everyone here?"

I would add a tag to this one as it seems the twins aren't speaking together anymore. Just pick one. :D


"What's it like, being a spy?"

"Um, I honestly can't remember, Fred."

I just wanted to commend you on using an interesting way to let the reader know who was speaking. :D

Ron nudged Hermione in the ribs, and looked at her questioningly.

"No, Ronald. I don't know everything, all right?"

Once again, that humor in a serious fic! Gotta love it!

Aww, that was cute/confusing/complex/gave me a headache. So much thinking! I like these kinds of stories! There's so much still hidden.

So far, it's incredibly mysterious. You don't really know if you can even trust them. I mean, she could have said all that stuff about the Lincoln Brigade just to get the Order to trust/accept them!

You just never know. I love it!

Next two chapters will have better reviews. ^^

Magically Yours,

Dem

Author's Response: Thank you for pointing those sentences out to me! I really appreciate it! I'll definitely go and fix them as soon as I get a chance.

I'm glad you noticed my dialogue technique. I get tired of all those, he saids and she replieds.

Ha! I'm glad you caught the little Ron/Hermione moment there! I loved that idea the second it appeared in my brain.

Also, I'm glad I've got you thinking about it. That's definitely important! And mystery is also important.

Thank you for the review!



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