This was quite beautiful! I loved it! (Though, I do have to admit it does seem to eschew a certain amount of angst, it doesn't dwell in it.)
The characterizations were brilliant. I loved how you made Lorcan so different from the average person and yet easy to relate with, at points.
This was beautifully gothic and sinister, and I enjoyed every bit of it. I think my favorite part of it all is that you know she still marries him despite the fact he had creeped her out with the coffins (but I think anyone in her position would). I adored that she destroyed the coffins, but all he can say is, 'Maybe I shouldn't have shown you them.' You think? xP
That is beyond weird, Lorcan. Beyond.
I don't mind that you picked Lily to talk about, in addition to Lorcan, because she seems to be an overlooked heroine. Most people want to write about Rose, Dominique, or Victoire. Especially Rose. Many people forget about Molly, Lucy, Lily, or Roxanne. Instead they focus on Rose or their OC's which is more than a bit annoying. So this piece was like a breath of fresh air.
I also adore that Scorpius wasn't mentioned. So many people make him the epitome of the next generation hero, and he's used time and time again. I'm so glad that you picked Lorcan, instead.
I didn't find any grammatical, spelling, or any other errors to speak of; so kudos there! You don't know how much I appreciate that, really.
Author's Response: Eek! Thank you (: I was worried that it was a little angsty, but I'm glad that you like it!
Oh and, by merlin, Lorcan is a bit of a weirdy guy in that aspect. Sensitive, but blunt as a particularly blunt axe at the same time. It's a brill song and I've been meaning to do something with it for ages, and the story basically follows the lyrics - except Florence of Florence and the Machine had more luck; her boyfriend told her he couldn't go to the cinema with her because he was building a cofifn for a photoshoot :)
And Lorcan is a really lovely name. It's one of my favourites. I'm a tad odd like that. Anyway, in the first draft I did actually have something like 'Rose, my cousin, tangled up with the Malfoy kid...' and then I struck it off. Naah, he's had too much glory in fic.
Thank you so much for the review! It's absolutely lovely, you've just made my day very good indeed :D