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Review:marinahill says:
You really captured the essence of young Dumbledore here. Had you not explain who it was at the start I would have known it was him anyway, just from the way you worded things, the way he approached that question. He was perfectly characterised. I find him an interesting character anyway, but you captured him almost at his most vulnerable and made it realistic. I also liked how your paragraphs were quite short - it sort of supported the fact that he was searching his mind for an answer, and I think we're all familiar with that feeling. Anyway, I got the feeling that his mind was all over the place, unable to concentrate.

A lovely piece :)


Author's Response: Thanks very much, Marina! It's wonderful to receive a review from you! ^_^

I'm glad to hear that Dumbledore was recognizable right away, even if I hadn't included his name. It was, at first, weird to try and characterize him differently from the old wise wizard in the books, which is why I took the shortcut and borrowed Sherlock Holmes's characterization. And yet it works, which is really weird - once I'd written a story with the two of them in it, but it didn't work canonically, but still... interesting to try again, maybe.

Nevertheless, I wanted to make Albus appear too smart for his own good - it drives him too distraction and makes it almost impossible to get along with other people, especially those he deems beneath him (which is probably most people). It's a personality that requires the shorter, more abrupt style because his brain is moving so fast and he doesn't need to describe everything because he already understands it (or thinks he does).

Thanks again for reading and reviewing! :D

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