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Review:TallestTower says:
Hey there, it's Broomsticks from the forums again with your reviews! :)

The description here was really good again, very well written and that made the time jumps much smoother.

I'm still confused, not in a bad way, but in a 'Hmm, all this mystery is really interesting' kind of way. I want to learn more about the organisation and the memory swiping!

I liked seeing the character development here. We learnt more about D and K, who I think are a pretty awesome team. I also loved seeing the members of the order, who I thought you characterized really well.

The dialogue was very realistic yet again and there were no slow parts, it flowed very well. I think thats one of the great things about this story so far - there have been no lulls, it's a very gripping story that snatches you and pulls you into the world of D and K.

I liked the idea of the test from the order, which I thought was exactly the type of thing they would do. I'm also interested to see what kind of work they're going to be doing with the order. I thought the plot development was really good, we now know more about what's going on, but there is still a lot of mystery which makes me want to read on!

Also, I didn't notice any grammar mistakes, which is lovely. So thank you for that!

This story has been really interesting to read so far. Hope this review was useful, see you again in chapter three!

Thanks for posting!

~ Broomsticks/TallestTower

Author's Response: Whew! It's a relief that the time jumps weren't too jumpy for you. I tried to make them as natural as I could, but I needed them to be a little jarring/disorienting because it creates an impression of the jolt-y time that K and D have to live with, missing some memories.

I worked so hard on getting the Weasley twins right. They're two of my favorite characters and I'd absolutely cry I couldn't get them perfect. That's really the main reason for the hold up on the update for this particular chapter. I'm also glad to hear that the dialogue is working and that there aren't lulls. This is a lot of set up to throw at people, but I know it needs to be there, or I can't move on with the story.

Thank you very much for the review! I appreciate it it greatly!


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