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Review:TallestTower says:
Hello there! It's Broomsticks here from the forums with your review. Sorry about the wait, hope it's helpful all the same!

So first impressions: Wow, this is certainly a gripping fic. I was sucked into it immediately and there is a sense of mystery and excitement in this first chapter that was really brilliant. It was a very good first chapter - the type that makes you want to read on!

The description and detail was great. Your use of language was really impressive and I thought you described everything brilliantly, the characters and sitatuations were very vivid.

As for the characters - I don't know what to say! They are shrouded in so much mystery it's hard for me to talk about their characters. But the mystery is great, and I'm eager to learn more.

They seem like very interesting OCs indeed - I read the summary and they have selective amnesia?! Woah.

I really liked the relationship between K and D, and I thought how they reacted was great. Their emotions and speech seemed very realistic and I liked how they were speaking in code a lot - it showed how focused they were for the job. Despite the light heartedness of the conversation, there was a formality lurking beneath the code. I'm interested to learn more about these characters :)

I really liked your characterization of Tonks. The way she didn't notice them slip in was very Tonks and I thought you understood her character really well. It's good to see her alive to be honest!

This plot is a very interesting one and I'm curious to see where it goes - can't wait to read on to chapter two and learn more!

The grammar and everything seemed fine, so I think that's it for now and I'll see you in chapter two! :)

~ Broomsticks/TallestTower

Author's Response: Wow. Sorry that it took me so long to respond - you just gave me so much to think about that I got flummoxed. Anyway, to the response.

I'm really glad that you were drawn in. That's something that I was very concerned about given that my story's a little bit off the beaten path. And description! I've been working on that, since I'm not that observant and K/D have to notice everything, since they're spies. The hardest part is filtering what they see into what you read on the page.

Characters are very important to me. I love a good plot, but a good plot, in my opinion, is nothing without strong characters. That's why I couldn't leave Tonks dead. She's such a strong woman and so quirky.

Thank you very much for the review!

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