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Review:BusinessJournal says:
Hello once again!

I thought this chapter was very well written. Your vocabulary was great, and your characterization was just as good. I really enjoyed reading Lily's bits int his chapter, and thought it was very interesting. There was a TON of information in this chapter, but you managed to keep it interesting and didn't rush it. I think this whole thing with the Gods and the Mages and whatnot is so original, I've never read anything like it. Keep up the good work, this promises to be a great storyline!!

Also... Was that a tad bit of foreshadowing I saw at the end there? When Lily was in pain, and that they were never going to get an explanation? If so, sweet! Can't wait to see what happens there.

Once again, I just have to mention the paragraph spacing, because I'm nitpicky. That's a good thing though, not much to complain about with this one!!

BusinessJournal

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you're enjoying the story, and I'm super excited that you caught on to the foreshadowing at the end and your enjoying the story line so much I've put a lot of work into this story and it makes me happy to know that you appreciate it. I'm glad you didn't think that this chapter had too much information in it, one of the reasons I requested reviews was for this very reason, I wanted to make sure that the story was still able to be followed easily.

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