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Review:BusinessJournal says:
Hello again!

I thought this chapter was quite cute, but sort of dry compared to the first, action-packed chapter. However, I do like the characterization in this chapter, and thought the catching up was charming. I was somewhat confused as to Sirius being there, I assume he didn't die in the Dept. of Mysteries in this AU?

Other than that, I just second my review of your first chapter in that the spacing and whatnot is a bit off, but a very easy fix. In terms of making this one a tad more exciting, perhaps you could add some of the first chapter into the beginning of this one? Or perhaps add the last prophecy to the end of this one? Just a couple suggestions, but you're obviously well on your way with this one, and it's quite endearing and interesting to read :) Quite intrigued to see what the last prophecy is!

BusinessJournal

Author's Response: Thanks for your review I'm glad you enjoyed it. I've had the same comment be made in other reviews about this chapter versus the first one however I wanted to keep this one as is because I don't want to give too much away all at once and keep the intrigue. I also wanted to use this chapter for characterization of Lily mostly so that the rest of the story makes sense. But no Sirius didn't die in the Dept. of Mysteries, I tried to allude to that in the first chapter with Hermione saying that they all barely made it out of their alive but I decided to keep Sirius in the story for reasons later on in the story. I'm glad your enjoying it so far though, thanks again for your reviews.

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