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Review:TallestTower says:
Hey it's Broomsticks from the forums with your review :) It was a very interesting story to read, because I've never read one on HPFF like this before.

- Narrator

I thought he was a really good narrator and I liked that this story was written in the first person because you get a better sense of emotion. Even though he was an OC you automatically get sucked into his thoughts, and I felt like I knew him quite well. It was heartbreaking to read his pain.

- Description

Your use of language was really good and I thought overall it was very well written. I liked how he questioned himself because it showed his doubt and confusion. I could see everything very vividly and you communicated emotions really well :)

- Dialogue

I thought the dialogue seemed really realistic. The only thing I thought could be improved about it was this bit: "doesnít love stop after death?" because I thought you could have just stopped as "Don't you mean loved?" so it was a bit more subtle.
But I thought the conversation between the two boys was very good.

- Grammar

The only thing I noticed was that you spelt Gryffindor wrong. You put "Griffindor."

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I thought this was a really good piece of writing. Tommy seemed like a very real character and it was an interesting plot. I think one of the most interesting things was the ending. I was expecting the third year to comfort him and make him realize he didn't kill her, but Tommy interrupted and I liked that because I wasn't expecting it, even though it's very sad.

I really enjoyed reading this! Hope this review is helpful. Sorry if I'm not making much sense, it's late as I write this. Thanks for requesting! :)

~ Broomsticks/Tallesttower

Author's Response: thank you so much for the wonderful review! don't worry, it's late here too so we can both not get our thoughts out right, deal? haha. i thought you made perfect sense! i'm really pleased to hear that you liked this though. that really helps me cherish this piece a lot more. when i wrote this, i didn't know why i was writing it but i hadn't seen anything like this on HPFF before so it seemed like an alright idea.


your thoughts make me feel like such an accomplished writer! i have so much to learn still but even so, i really really appreciate all of the compliments and positive thoughts. i'll have to fix that Gryffindor error right away! funny how that happened...?

well, i hope you have an amazing night and thank you again for the lovely review. i appreciate it very much! (:


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