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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
Sami! It's Leslie and I'm here to review as requested! First off, before I get started, I'll just say (or rather write :P) that I really like the way you've written this first chapter... it's kind of like a stream of conscience, actually, what with it being narrated all in thought. Anyway...

Characterisation: I seriously think you've captured Fleur's character quite magnificently with how being half-veela makes her feel. It's unique and original, not to mention different than how she's normally perceived by other authors who've written her. She's definitely one of the harder minor characters to write in my own opinion because it's almost like people expect her to be stuck-up what with being a half-veela. But it's clear from the books that she has more depth to her than that, and already in this first chapter you've made it clear just how much depth she has in her.

Flow: I thought this flowed quite well, and I'm looking forward to reading more. There's not much else I can critique on this chapter with it being relatively short other than the fact that I enjoyed.

Author's Response: Leslieee! You know, it kind of felt like a stream of conscience at the time. This chapter/whole story was an experiment of sorts, and I had a vague idea before I started, but not much.

I think in canon it lightly brushed on the idea that there was more to Fleur than met the eye, and I expanded on that and made this. It is kind of scary trying to stick to the plot of this story while keeping the Fleur we know semi-in-character, so merci for the characterization comments.

Thank you for reviewing, Leslie!

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