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Review:confusedlover says:
very lovely.

woah! what an amazing introductory chapter! there really wasn't a lot of substance to this piece (which is totally understandable because there really doesn't have to be when a story is just starting out) but nevertheless i found this very very enjoyable.

your grammar, as far as i can tell, is well in check. i can't promise that nothing is wrong but from where i stand i didn't see anything at all that you should be worried about. i thought your grammar was a huge part of why i like this story so far so that should make you feel better. when things are grammatically correct, the entire story flows better and when things flow better, well, that just makes the entire chapter all the more easier to get through.

overall, i thought this was a great start to a story. this has a lot of potential, especially because you left so much hanging. right now, it's up to the reader to say who they thought got married and who the intruder could be, and that's always a nice way to continue from. feel free to request again on my review thread anytime you wish, especially when you update this story. i would honestly love to see where you end up taking this. keep up the fantastic writing and have a wonderful week!

Author's Response: thank you for the fast review! i'm happy you like it so far and that the grammar is alright so far. I'm rather terrible at my comma's i'm afraid XD

thank you again! i hope to update soon, so i'll back to your thread soon as well.

as i've said before, thank you again!

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