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Review:icefire_lioness says:
Hi! Maja here from the forums with your (long overdue) review.

I'll start this off by saying that I'm actually not a big fan of Remus/Tonks, but I'll try not to let that influence my review. :D

The plot was good, and your writing style is generally quite high quality. There were a few grammatical errors and sentence structure issues that grated a little, but all in all it was well written.

The flow from each section didn't confuse me personally, so I think you're fine there.

I have one major issue, and it's a plot one, rather than any writing style stuff. This is the issue of the death of Remus' ex lover. It seems ridiculously implausible for him to have stayed with her on the same day his transformation was coming up, because he would have realised just how much danger he posed to her. Remus is a very careful character, not in the least reckless as James and Sirius were, so it strikes me as pretty odd that he would do something like that. Anyway.

Good story overall; I enjoyed it. :D

Good luck with your writing!

Author's Response: Hey!

No worries about how long overdue it is, but rather, thanks for your awesome review!

Haha that's okay. Thank you very much! I'm glad you found it okay, and I'm especially glad that my writing style is of high quality!

That's perfectly fine. I do agree with your argument to some point, but to justify that - Remus became the 'more careful character' after that event. However, that part is integral to my story and I can't think of any way to change it... Maybe he was drunk? haha

But thank you very much for your kindly worded review! :)

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