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Review:marinahill says:
I shall ignore the ridiculous dedication because it's not necessary and it embarrasses me ♥

I feel like crying, this chapter really touched me... Daphne is so real and you've created her out of so few words. How do you do it? You've made her so much more than just words on a page, she seems to just leap out and I feel I know her so well when really that's impossible... or it should be. But you're not like other writers, so I suppose anything is possible with you. She's this whimsical, airy character yet at the same time the level of depth to her is just extraordinary - her hopes, her fears... it's all here and depicted in such beautiful terms. What I find most pretty about her character is how she is so simply and completely in love with Dean - so much so that life around her ceases to exist when he's not there and it's so poetic and beautiful and that's why it brings me to tears.

It's a hard concept to pull off, portraying simply the strength of the love between two people but you do it with such magnificent style. As I said, it's poetic and I don't use the term lightly. I know you've mastered all the boring grammatical/prose rules and so you're now able to just break them. You've taken everything it means to be a gifted writer and bent it to your advantage and that's why this is so wonderful. The sentences merge together that they probably don't need anything else but your words because it works. It's beautifully written, I can't express it any other way. Your manipulation of the english language is flawless. (vocabulary is fab, of course).

You know what makes me love this the most? It's your choice of words and how you phrase it all. It's so easy to be lazy with description but you just take something simple and make it your own. sugar mice teeth and cherry drop lips ... how simple in theory, yet so effective and completely apt. Your imagery is stunning and your use of metaphor is definitely your strongest point - it takes talent to twist ordinary objects into the poetry that you've created here. I could list at least one thing in each sentence that makes me completely melt by how gorgeous your description is... you never make me feel like you're overdosing on prettiness because it's so natural!! I want your talent. You have the best descriptive skills I've ever come across and no one has made me love fluff more than you.

I love you so much, I love your writing possibly nearly as much and if you ever stop writing this I'll come after you with the fish.

♥

Marina

Author's Response: Gosh, my love, you really do have it in for me don't you? I love your long reviews but they aren't half difficult to respond to.

That dedication is (a) thoroughly deserved and (b) nowhere near as ridiculous as my CIAW dedications :P I'm a soppy, emotional wreck and this is the result.

Oh don't cryyy. If I knew how I did it, I'd tell you. Hearing that she's so real - which is something I'd never really thought of her before - is enormously comforting but also to hear all the words you've used to describe her because she's undoubtedly airy, somewhat distant. I think I wanted to make her a somewhat stereotypical artsy character. She puts her all into everything, so passionately and wholly and I think from what you're saying, that's coming off a little so thank you for the reassurance (because I always need it.)

It's an impossibly hard concept, partly due to the subjectivity, I suppose. Even I don't wholly believe what I write in this because it's so...fictional and I know that sounds silly but it is. The idealism of it definitely affects the realistic aspect of it but I'm not sure I want it to matter.

You know, that bit about knowing the rules so you can break them? Yeah, that's possibly my favourite line from every review I've ever received because...it's so true. I don't mean of me - perhaps it is, it's hard to judge - but of so, so many people. Anyway, that's rambling a bit and I'll maybe discuss that with you again.

If someone is lazy with description, they must be shot :P I'm sure you'll share that with me. There's no need for it.
See...the thing that I love about these reviews is how it points out the unintentional. I don't really think about what I'm writing and it always surprises me when people point out lines or devices or anything that I haven't realised I've used. I don't know why...

"Overdosing on prettiness" - beautiful imagery yourself, lovely, so don't be stupid. Your own descriptive skills are so far superior to mine but to know that I've made you enjoy fluff is like...this amazingly epic compliment that I don't deserve due to the high volume of far superior writers of this genre.

I love you too but it must come to an end and if you bring that fish after me, I will delete it all.

Thank you so, so much. This review made me cry on first, second and countless other readings and I cannot express how grateful I am for it, and for you.

ILY
♥
xx

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