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Review:elegantphoenix says:
Of the Founders, I've always liked the Ravenclaws best. Perhaps it's because of their immense intellect, or because the color blue is my favorite, but whatever the cause I always enjoy reading stories about them. However, this story happens to only be the second Founders era story I've read, ever. So, I'm not sure how I have a preference.

Anyway.

I really liked this. Helena is often seen as sort of envious to her mother's plethora of knowledge, wisdom, and influence; cast into the shadows by her own mother. You've managed to give Helena a stronger character, but I can still sort of see the envy underneath - she does wish to be greater than her mother one day, does she not? I've never come across a story where the Mirror of Erised was used outside of the Hogwarts Era (though I'm sure there are some lurking round here somewhere) so this was quite original. Admittedly, it was short, but in saying that it was also very well written. The plot flowed well, and your characterization was very believable.

I think one thing you might need to do is give this another look, checking for some grammatical errors here and there; you seem to have spelled their name wrong as well - it's Ravenclaw, instead of Ravanclaw. Not saying it to be mean, just being helpful as many people have a pet peeve of canon character names being misspelled.

Good work here.
9/10 :)

Best,
Nadhira

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I've always hated how Helena is seen as weak. She was one of my favorite characters to write. I'm thinking about writing another and longer Helena story...
Thanks for pointing that out! Grammer isn't my strongest suit. I'll make the changes soon.
-Liza


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