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Review:elegantphoenix says:
OK, it's good that you cleared up the bit about Rose's hair at the end, because I WAS going to ask. Sorry. Well, on to the review. :)

I thought that this was really well written for a first chapter. The plot flow was nice, and your interactions between characters was brought out well in both their actions and descriptions. I could really feel/see how much Rose was in pain after she'd left Christian's house. At the beginning, I was a bit unsure about who this story was about, but that's alright. You managed to clear it up quite... reasonably? I think that's the right word, but then again maybe it isn't. I hope you understand what I'm trying to say :P

One thing that particularly irked me was the cell phone. I understand that, as a technology prone teenager, we're all tempted to write in things like phones, etcetera; but you've got to remember that most people in the wizarding world aren't as technology prone as we are, no matter the year or generation. It's how the original characters (Hermione, Ron, Draco, Neville, Luna, etc) were raised, so wouldn't they instill that tradition in them? Just something to think about.

Overall, that was very nicely written, and a fresh way to look at Rose's character (no longer the excessively smart bookworm head over heels in love with a certain Malfoy as usual, eh?).

Best,
Nadhira

Author's Response: Hi Nadhira,
I'm glad that you like it. I was set on going on a different path than the usual redheaded bookworm Rose, and I was quite nervous about the outcome, but it seems like it's ok like this.
About the cellphone. As you'll see in the next chapters, Rose and the rest of her "magical" friends are living with muggles, so they have adopted a lot of muggle things into their lifes to fit in. Hence the cellphone:)
Thank you for your wonderfull review, and look out for the next chapter in the upcoming week :)


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