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Review:propertyoftheHBP says:
Hello! I'm here from the forums with your requested review. :)

I like your plot idea. I mean really, poor James, but it's really intriguing and I'm eager to see where it goes. (Actually, no 'poor James' from me, I'm not his biggest fan at all, so I have no moral qualms about liking this ship. xD)

Your characterization of Lily is very good, as well. I can really feel her as 'Lily', as well as her being nervous and excited around Sirius. Though I have to ask, if she's fifteen in the story (as the top of the chapter says 1975 and she was born in 1960), wouldn't she already know who Sirius was? She gets introduced to both he and James on the first train ride to Hogwarts, so I'm a bit confused about the dates. Sirius' character was well-done, too--he had an air of haughtiness around Lily, without coming across as the cliched womanizer that he's often portrayed as, so that's a huge plus there from me.

I thought that your description fit in nicely with the flow of the story as well--it didn't go on for paragraphs and paragraphs, and it wasn't too brief, either. I could picture the setting nicely, so good job there.

I think that you've got a good start! I'm excited to see where this goes, so please rerequest once you have another chapter up, if you'd like. :)

Author's Response: Hi! :)

I'm really happy to see that you enjoyed this chapter, the characterizations of the two main characters, and the description. As for Lily meeting them on the train their first year - I did not know that until now, actually. :o So, I suppose this story may be a tad AU, but that's alright, I think...

Anyroad, thanks for taking the time to read and review! I'm glad you thought it was a good start, and I will be sure to drop by for another review once I've managed to get the next chapter validated :)


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