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Review:Miriel says:
Hey! It's Miriel to review your story!

First of all, I really liked it. It was completely different than other stories about Draco, because you made him Voldemort's son. That idea isn't new, but the way you wrote it made it somehow belivable, though I still find it extreme.

Draco said that his mother was just a conventional shag for Voldemort, do you refer on Narcissa here or is his mother somebody else? I'd really like to know that.

The whole scene in which Draco stands up against his father and slowly reveals the circumstances of his life was really touching. In the same way I, as the reader, started to like Draco as a character in this story, the Dark Lord's fury about Draco's revelations and actions increased. I don't know wether you wrote it that way intentionally, but the effect was great.

I just want to add a few words about the ending. I found it so sad...Instead of being reunited with Hermione Draco killed his father and continued being in grief. You could say that it was for the greater good, but it's still a cruel destiny. But while thinking about it I realised that this ending is better than a melodramatic final with a meeting in heaven or something like that. So it's well choosen:)

For grammar and stile, I didn't notive anything here, the flow of the story is great. You did a really good job with that!

All in all, I enjoyed this One-shot a lot. It was unorthodox, but very well written. I loved the way you described Draco's feelings, because I think that it is a great thing if the readers can identificate themselves with the person in the story. Congrats for that!


Greets
Miriel

Author's Response: Sorry it's taken so long to reply. Thanks so much for the review!

On the Narcissa question, she is still Draco's mother but I like to think that she was 'offered' to Voldy by Lucius. With the tension increase I have to be honest and say that it wasn't exactly pre-meditated but I did go with the flow as it were.

I honestly couldn't have this ending any other way. It's such a dark and angsty piece that it needs a truly awful ending really. I wouldn't want it to suddenly be all fluffy because it would negate and detract from the rest of it.

Thanks so much for the review and I'm really glad you liked it :)


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