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Review:Rose_Weasley123 says:
Here for your first prize for my challenge :D (long overdue). Anyway lovely, on we shall go! I've missed your gorgeous writing, and it never fails to amaze me how well you write.

First things first, I love the lines in italics! They really add another dimension to the story. Looking at it, I thought they might be jarring or just serve no purpose, but this was one of those rare occasions when they added something to substantial to the story, which I loved.

I really liked the characterisation today. It was an interesting dynamic you created between both characters. All their actions hinted at some backstory between them, but I liked how you never explained what that was. It left us to fill in the gaps, which is something I love in FF. I loved how you developed the characters even over the course of the one shot... you did become attatched to them, and I definitely got a feel of the kind of people they were.

The description was gorgeous, of course. Description is always one of the highlights of your writing, and this did not fail to deliver a gorgeous read. All of it slotted together perfectly, and it almost read like poetry.

The romance was beautifully written- the only thing I wasn't quite so sure about, and it really was a minor quibble, was that the transition from being scared of Ted to kissing him was a little too abrupt. Apart from that, the dialogue and actions between them felt completely natural.

The dialogue worked really well in this- using it sparingly was definitely the right choice. The actions said so much more in this, and too much dialogue would have just clogged it up.

Simply stunning Rin, really. I loved every second.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

I was so worried about those lines in italics. I was thinking that they may or may not detract from the story, so I am SO relieved that you didn't find them distracting at all! So thank you SO much for mentioning that (should I stop saying SO now? :P).

Mmmm, I've already mentioned by quibbles with dialogue. The whole... thing... just... kills me. So I can completely see where you might have a hard transition in that little part. Still, thanks so much for mentioning it! I'm glad you spotted it, so I can look back on it.

Again, thank you! I appreciate it so, so (SO) much.

- Rin

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