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Review:Jackson Robles says:
XD I skimmed the last line at first and then read your AN to see it was a cliffhanger. Had to go back and check! Hmm, wonder what it was that Sam indeed found. Could it be a pool of blood? The dead walking again?! Peeves crying?

You never know. ... Well, you do, actually. It's just me that's in the dark. And I can't even apologize for how long this has taken me. I've been kind of on the fence with things lately and haven't had much store for really anything but forum lurking you know? XD But that's over with!

And we must look at this chapter. I chuckled at the use of histrionically. Not a bad use. Did you know the word? Synonym? Or had you learned it from psych? That's where I knew it from anyway... Grammar wise, well, I wasn't looking much. I think I noticed one comma at the end of dialogue that probably should have been a period, and while I do notice it it's not like I'm angry and hounding at my keyboard because of it :P I just see it and point it out! Promise.

But content wise this is an interesting... path we are taking, most definitely. I mean, Harry and Ron friends with your pack of OC Slytherins? And Hermione in the midst behaving like a regular gal?! I'd never heard of such a thing. Not saying I don't buy it, but I think you've hit 'near' originality there. I mean, because I can't say it's original - mainly because I've never read a Dramione... or MANY Dramiones, my bad. XD

Talking about the piece, I think that it's interesting you have Draco keep coming back and talking to her. He's been avoiding almost everyone else, or at least ignoring them (and in Mandy's case ragging on them) but to Hermione he talks, smiles and taunts. It's interesting. Makes me believe that this has something to do with the story. And I can flush it out a little bit more than that because we do know this is a Dramione, so Draco can't be the real bad guy. He can't, murderer or not, he's got to come around to their side eventually. And Sam + Mandy/Harry + Ron maybe, if Theo and Garrett are killed. I just see it working. And then at least the Trio'd be shipped off (cue pun music) to Slythies! Mandy/Ron by the way, but we'll have to see how it goes. That's just a shot in the dark. Maybe Harry'll die and he won't find himself a gal. Maybe that's what Ginny's for. But... Ginny? Who knows, this is a novel/la right? Means we got a lot of time to work on this. :P

Plot wise, well, it didn't turn out to be just a Saturday afternoon, did it? Well, at least, it looks like it might be something dangerous. Also liked how Samantha asked for McGonagall instead of Slughorn or Snape. Just kind of... bridging how gaps early on, I suppose. And hard to believe we're just on Chapter Five! Wonder what might start happening you know? I can see the murder, but I can't see past it you know? Are they going to try and solve it? Everyone'll probably think it's Draco, but will Hermione know the truth and have to figure it out herself? Who knows! I sure don't. :D But you do!

And I wonder, well, that's for the next chapter! So I better get hopping on it! See you there, yeah?

Great chapter by the way, if I haven't said already!

Jackson

Author's Response: Oh Jackson. :D You make my day. :]

This review (coupled with my 32 on the ACT) has seriously made me smile so much it's ridiculous.

I'm so glad you liked this one! And I absolutely love your speculations! I hope you'll read chapter six soon (if that's what you were saying you were off to do). I think you'll like it.

We're starting to pick up plotwise and it's gonna get really awesome, really fast. Hahaha, or at least, I think it will. Though you probably won't like chapter seven when I crank it out. It's pretty cliche. :P

But anyhow... I do love the word "histrionic." It's one of my favorites. :] I don't really recall where I picked it up, but I use it often.

Thank you so much for reviewing and making my day. :D I'm sure I'll hear from you again sometime.

--Emily


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