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Review:Cherry Bear says:
I'm finally here with your second review! Sorry it's taken me so long. I'm going to have to comment again on how creative and original you are in pretty much everything in this story. I've seen by your other stories so far that you like to focus on the more underdeveloped characters of the Potterverse, so I wasn't surprised to see this story focused on Hugo. I also wasn't surprised that this wasn't anything like more than half of the Next-Gen stories out there, mostly because your writing style is so incredibly unique.

Let me start first with your characterization of Hugo, which shines through this entire story. Perhaps it's just because it's like a diary entry, but I honestly thought you established Hugo's character very well despite how bizarre he is. Right off the bat, I knew this wasn't going to be anything like any other Hugo I've read on this sight, particularly because he referred to his own parents by their first names and used completely loaded and formal language. I loved that you made him completely insane, condescending, and egotistical - pretty much exactly what Ron and Hermione's child would be like if you mixed some of their less admirable traits together. He has the exact blend of know-it-all genius and stubborn idiot, if that makes sense.

I think my favorite part of this is the humor. As I think I mentioned before, you have a very distinct style of humor, and in this story it's not quite as outright but it's funny when you pick up on it. It's not the type of humor in witty one-liners or anything like that - the only term I can really think to describe it is dramatic irony, although I'm not sure if that's right. What made Hugo's antics and thoughts more humorous for me is that I knew that he was being ridiculous even though he was oblivious to the fact. And the bizarre scientific language is completely fitting for his character, but once you decipher what he's saying it makes it even more funny - I pray I never meet anyone who talks like that.

I did have a problem imagining Hugo's interactions with his parents. I don't know if this is a fault of yours or just my own imagination lacking (yeah, I'm leaning towards the latter too), but I honestly cannot picture Ron putting up with Hugo at all. In this, Hugo mentions several times talking with his dad, but despite the fact that Hugo is his son I really don't think Ron with be able to put up with how insufferable he is (although he does put up with Hermione...) And considering how pretentious Hugo is, I found it odd that Ron would really be okay with a son who considers him 'simple'. Perhaps I'm just projecting my own inability to handle people like that, though ;)

I've already mentioned Hugo's character, but he is by far my favorite part of this and I really adore how you showed the readers what kind of person he was. The plot was simple but when you tied in Hugo's reaction to rejection it made it memorable and gave the story something worthwhile. I thought the last line of this was particularly all-telling of Hugo's personality, maybe because a part of me would've been (if not for the summary) expecting him to 'conform to society's protocol' as he puts it. I've always been a fan of a big finish, and I think that that last line would be even better if the reader didn't expect it because of the summary. But that's purely a personal preference thing. And in that general area, I think the title is fantastic and original (much like everything you write) and I'm a bit surprised that this has so little reviews.

And that's all I've really got to say about this. Once again, a fantastic piece of writing. I can't stress enough how original your ideas are, or how well your writing seems to flow so smoothly no matter what. This was great!

Cherry Bear

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