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Review:FoundriaPenguin says:
Hello again!

I feel like the chapter was marching along fine most of the time, but you could've elaborated more on how Dom and Ted felt about the whole ordeal. You implied it, but then you rushed past it like the wind! I think by inputting more description of their emotion the chapter wouldn't feel as rushed, but you could still rush it, you know what I mean?

Also, the thing about how Dom and Teddy slept together and then just felt fine about it after seems a bit unnatural to me, but I haven't read the first three chapters of the story, so maybe it's a part of their character, I don't know.

I hope I don't sound harsh, but I like giving my honest opinion! (:

~foundriapenguin

Author's Response: Hi!

Thanks for mentioning that. I feel like a usually do lots of description in this story and tried to feel around make this one more action less words, but as you pointed out, I left out some elaboration.

I was mostly meant to seem rushed and unnatural because they weren't/ aren't really in love (...yet?!).

It wasn't harsh at all. Thanks for pointing this out!

becca xx :)


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