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Review:Jackson Robles says:
Hullo Ms. Black (that is officially the funny) - I was going to point out a few areas that needed 'super edits' - but looking like you're going to get to them soon anyways - so I'll stave off and wait anxiously for 'defiantly' to be turned to 'definitely' :P

But what are we looking at here in terms of story? It's a very interesting set up. I like the whole idea of the house and Justin! It's Wilson from House! A younger Wilson of course, but I think that totally works for him. I definitely hear his voice now. I also liked the lion smelling their wand to let them in.

But to the characters themselves! Won't this be an interesting - well, year? That was a very funny instance with the two boys oggling Nesta. I'm sure that'll lead to some interesting conversations between the boys later in the story. And then we have Hazel! She didn't have much in this bit did she? Well, I get the feeling from the banner that this is the girl to watch.

And! I totally knew it was a Potter house. I actually thought it was their home in England before Justin said anything. For some reason I was willing to accept the Thames as being just 10 feet across. Silly me.

Oh well. At least I didn't take my entire story do--- oh yeah. Haha - I was totally just talking in general. Not about you at all. *whistles innocently*

But I do enjoy reading this story. It's - innocent? Easy going? It's definitely a good story. I mean, so far as I can tell ;)


Author's Response: Mr. Jackson,

I should tell you that 'defiantly/definitely' is one of my cruxes... I can NEVER spell "definitely" correctly (I'm actually REALLY happy that you already spelled it in your review so I can reference it & not make a fool of myself in this response). So don't be too surprised when you see it again... I'm sure its there a few times (silly me & my lack of spelling skills).

I'm going to go & quickly fix that error... I'll go back & find the others later during the mass edit...

You're right, Hazel will play a larger role as the story progresses. Nesta and her younger sister will glean some more attention as well.

I suppose this could have been in England. I chose Venice b/c I'm pretty familiar with the city. My family lives close by so during my summer visits my cousins & I have done the tourist-y thing there a few times. It seemed like a fun place to set the story.

Ok... I'll take the ridicule. I'm a bit absurd, I'll admit. Only a REALLY gullible, REALLY irrational person would take down their story... on April Fool's Day... That was a fail.

I'm glad you're enjoying it. Thanks for reviewing :)

-Ms. Black :P

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