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Review:alyosha says:
This probably goes without saying, since all of your stories are so wonderfully written, but i really quite liked this. You are so good at describing things.

And I quote,

"Her breath rises in a delicate cloud in the chill air."

Just everything about this story is so good. I think the isolation of Helena comes through the descriptions as well, a girl alone with only a raging blue fire for company, and a hole in her boot. She may have gained wisdom with the diadem, but she was a fool to take it in the first place.

I am always intrigued to read Founders Era stories, as they are so often under-represented on this site. And I think your portrayal of Helena was one of the only times where I could actually see where she was coming from without fully hating her personality.

So to avoid writing a review as long as your story itself, i shall just conclude in saying that this was well done.

And Nantes has to have made you the best banner in the world, or thereabouts

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review - I'm sorry it took me a long time to respond!

That line you quoted was actually an afterthought, because I thought that part needed a little something extra. It clearly paid off, but it was so funny to see that line quoted, out of all others!

I am also intrigued by Founders stories, for exactly the same reason - they're a rare find. I've always been afraid to try it myself, as period pieces are not my forte, but I love to read a well-written Founders.

I wanted to redeem Helena a bit - keep her obvious flaws, but make her a bit more sympathetic. I think her story was a sad and lonely one, so there is some room there to feel for her.

Yes, the banner is lovely - I fell in love with it right away. And it was actually in the Up for Grabs section! I couldn't believe my luck in finding it, because I was near to tearing my hair out, trying to figure out a good banner for a collection of one-shots about largely unrelated characters.

Thanks again for the review!

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