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Review:Laugharama_llama says:
I think this was a great introduction to the story. It was a nice summary of what's going on, but shown through a scene - which I love :D

I don't know if I can comment too much on characterization, just because I haven't seen much of the characters. So far, however, the characterization seems to be pretty solid. I can't really tell if Rose is a brave person, who is just scared of the situation, or who is scared for Mitchell because they have a relationship? Or maybe she's not a brave person?

I actually feel like this is the perfect length for a chapter. Personally, I always say, "the longer, the better!" But I know a lot of readers get tired of reading really long chapters. I think this would satisfy those readers, because this length is very middle ground. It's not too long, and not too short, and you don't really feel the length either because it's a nice read :D

Again, very mysterious, very curious, and very intriguing. If I had anything to criticize, it might be to throw some more hints at the reader, but it's not that big of a deal. I feel like your summary takes care of the information well enough. That being said, perhaps you should spice up your summary a little. Maybe end it with some sort of question mark, draw the reader in a little more. I feel like it didn't flow too much, if that makes any sense.

Great job though! :D

Author's Response: Hi again!

I am so glad you liked it. Hmm...well I would say Rose is a pretty brave girl, considering what she's gone through. She's just scared of the situation, and also scared for Mitchell because of how long she has known him.

Oh good! I was very worried about the chapter length. I thought it was a good deal shorter than it should be. So that puts my mind at ease.

Thanks for pointing out the summary to me. I've been thinking about getting some advice on what I should do about making it sound better, but I never did it. Thanks again for the reviews! They were loads of help! ^_^

~amandatonks


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