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Review:xkaittloveex says:
Oh my goodness, so freakin' adorable! This was ahhh...Let me start off by saying thank you for joining and sticking with my very first challenge. It means so much to me that you wanted to participate. So thank you so very much.

First of all, I loved how Harry was shown in this fiction. I just love the idea of Harry being a father. Especially to his baby girl. It's just such a sweet concept that makes me go "aw!" And sometimes I just need a little "aw"...you know what I mean?! Well this story definitely delivered that warm and fuzzy feeling I haven't found in a while. So nicely done there!

Next, I LOVED how you portrayed James and Albus!!! Two big brothers protecting their little sister. Ah, so adorable. The part where Lily explains how they cursed him so badly...priceless.

But my favorite part would have to be the second part of the one-shot. Of course you know I'm talking about when Lily meets the new boy. To be honest, I really wasn't expecting it to happen but I am so overjoyed it did. It was such a cute, innocent interaction and I hope it really does turn into more. Maybe a sequel is in order here?! I would definitely be first in line to read it!!! ;)

There were some minor grammar and punctuation errors but not important enough to comment on right now. A quick run-through should help you fix those suckers up.

Overall, I really enjoyed this. Thank you again for entering my contest! It means so much to me! And keep up the awesome work.

Author's Response: Thank you for making such a wonderful challenge! I'm glad I could stick by it. As soon as I got this quote I knew I wanted to make it a Harry/daughter one-shot! And after THREE tries I finally got it right!! lol

I'm glad I could write him like the fatherly type I've wanted to read myself. And I completely agree. Sometimes "Aww!" is appreciated lol. I also really enjoyed writing Albus and James. I never really had an older brother (what with being the older sister) and they represent the type of older brother I've always wanted lol; Protective, caring, and loving.

As to the second part: I wanted the ending to have some type of--I'm not sure--hopeful ending? Lily deserves a happy ending, or maybe the right words are 'new beginning'? lol, and she'll get it ;)
I'm actually really happy I've been asked for a sequel! Because that's exactly what I was going for, and I'll get on that immediately lol.

And, terribly sorry for the grammar! Lol.. I'll look it over and fix the grammar and punctuations as soon as I can.. =]

Thank you so much for reading and taking your time to leave this wonderfully long review! *hands freshly baked sugar cookie* I truly appreciate it! I promise to have the sequel up soon!


-Theia..=]


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