|Review:||Violet Gryfindor says:|
I'm going to apologize first for being a puddle of mush while writing this review. The story has made me squee and feel all happy, not just because of how it ends, but also the writing, which is pitch-perfect. Not that I would have expected anything else from you, Jo, since you're a brilliant writer, but the shortness of this story has really brought out the absolute best of your style and talent. :D
What I love most in this is how you work the transition between Victoire and Rose, how Rose matures and becomes the girl that Teddy actually loves most. Victoire is perfect, but too perfect, more than human, and that, in the end, makes her a vision, an ideal, but not right. Just from the language, I could see how young Teddy was in the first part of the story - it's so poetical in a flowery and romantic way (little-r romantic, though I do see a lot of big-R Romantic influence here). The second half reveals a Teddy that is somewhat different, more experienced, more knowing of himself and the world. There's still that idealistic romance there (especially in the fairy tale image), but I see something else in the language too. Arg, I can't describe it - it's just a feeling I got from the two separate halves of this story.
The line I liked most was Her name is Rose, not Victory, and it matters not if she smells as sweet. because you played with the R&J quote in a good way - something I haven't seen much of, especially because most people butcher it or make it sugary sweet. Here, you contradict that Shakespeare quote and it works so well.
Haha, if I ever need to describe what I think about the Teddy/Rose ship, I'll just point people to this story because it's exactly what I mean, but cannot put into words. I really love what you've done with this story and it's definitely going on my favourites list as one of my favourite Teddy romance stories, perhaps even my favourite Teddy/Rose. ^_^