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Review:xxSTARxx says:
(This didn't show up the first time I posted it, so forgive me if it ends up on here twice).

Great story, I've had this sat in my favourites for ages, and I eventually got around to reading it, read the 1st one first (obviously) and it was so good that I just had to keep reading. Hence, I then started this one.

I've thought of how she can get him to remember her:
She can break into Dumbledore's office and steal his pensive (or just explain to him why she needs it), then put all of her memories with Alec into it and then Jenyse and Ian can go through the pensive, and maybe just maybe, when he sees everything that happened between them, he might remember. Just my theory anyway, you've probably got something else planned though.

Why did you let her kiss Travis?!?!?! Now everything's going to be awkward!!
A) The Marauders won't be very understanding if and when they find out.
B) She'll lose Travis as a friend because things will be just too awkward between them now.
C) She'll have to repair the damage and pain it caused to Ian/Alec.
D) Even if Ian's memory of Alec does come back, he'll still have the memory of what just happened, and will be angry that she betrayed him like that - even after all her assurances that they were 'just friends'.

Ooh! I was listening to some songs the other day and they seemed to fit this story really well. One of them was "Please Remember - Leann Rimes". The lyrics are:

Time, sometimes the time just slips away/And your left with yesterday/Left with the memories/I, I'll always think of you and smile/And be happy for the time/I had you with me
Though we go our separate ways/I won't forget so don't forget/the memories we've made.
(Chorus)
Please remember, please remember/I was there for you
and you were there for me/Please remember, our time together
The time was yours and mine/And we were wild and free/Please remember, please remember me.

Goodbye, there's just no sadder word to say/And it's sad to walk away/with just the memories/Who's to know what might have been/We'll leave behind a life and time/We'll never know again.
(Chorus)
And how we laughed and how we smiled/And how this world was yours and mine/and how no dream was out of reach
I stood by you, you stood by me/We took each day and made it shine/We wrote our names across the sky/We ran so fast, we ran so free/I had you and you had me.
Please remember, please remember.


I think that fits in quite well. Either with her struggle to forget about Alec (before Ian came to Hogwarts) or about when Alec died, it could fit there because he promised he'd remember her.

The other one I thought kind of fitted with your story was "What Hurts The Most - Rascal Flatts (or Cascada)". The lyrics are:
I can take the rain on the roof of this empty house/That don't bother me/I can take a few tears now and then and just let 'em out/I'm not afraid to cry every once in a while/Even though going on with you gone still upsets me/There are days every now and again I pretend I'm ok/But thatís not what gets me.
(Chorus)What hurts the most/Is being so close/And having so much to say/And watching you walk away/And never knowing/What could have been/And not seeing that loving you
Is what I was tryin' to do.

It's hard to deal with the pain of losing you everywhere I go/But I'm doin' It/It's hard to force that smile when I see our old friends and I'm alone/Still Harder/Getting up, getting dressed, livin' with this regret/But I know if I could do it over/
I would trade give away all the words that I saved in my heart/That I left unspoken.
(Chorus x2)
I'm saying that loving you/That's what I was tryin' to do.


I think this sort of shows how she felt in the month between losing Alec and then him coming back as Ian. Especially the chorus, it hurts her to be around him, because he's not the same guy she fell in love with.


Okay, now that I've left an extremely long (and probably mostly irrelevent) review, I'm gonna go now.

Please add the next chapter soon!! Please!!


(P.S: 10/10)
:D

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