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Review:Rose_Weasley123 says:
Mel, this was gorgeous!

I loved the use of parenthesis at the beginning. I've seen it used a few times (once by myself ;D), but your use of it is original, and it really adds something to the story.

I thought this must be Albus, but I may be wrong. I am never any good at guessing these things :P.

I loved the poetic feel to this! It flowed beautifully and was just all lovely. It almost felt like a stream of consciousness.

Ah, I really enjoyed this. :D.

PS All round favourite lines would be these:

'For there is compassion in his silence, and there is faithfulness in his sigh. There is wisdom in his scruples, and in the circles under his eyes. And he places his trust every last crumb of belief in certainty and sanity and the love of everything secure.'

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Becca!

You had a similar idea as Kaity - she thought it might be Albus, too. In fact I had Percy in mind when I wrote it, but I like that it's a little more ambiguous than I assumed it was. :-)

I hope the poetic stuff isn't overdone - I threw some rhymes in there, and I tried to make the lines rhythmic, but I didn't want it to sound corny. I'm glad you liked it!

And I think those lines are some of my favorite, too. When I look at this one-shot, I think I'm happiest with the lines that you quoted.

Thanks for reviewing!

xoxo
Melanie


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