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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
Hello again, back to review. I like how you've drawn up the character of Helen Black as a stubborn, headstrong young woman, who can stand her ground for what she wants and doesn't want. Her reactions to being sold off to marry Canis Malfoy were realistic, especially since she didn't have any interest in marrying at all to begin with.

Also, I like how you've written the relationship between her parents and her; it seems as though she's definitely more of a daddy's girl than a mama's girl, well that is until her refusal to wed Canis, and thus cause her father and mother to argue. The whole disagreement seemed natural and flowed well with everything else in this chapter. All the characters' reactions sprang up from the screen, and I was able to imagine how everything happened like a movie playing in my head (that's the best part about reading in my own personal opinion).

And then the closing of this chapter where Helen decides she will go to Eygpt on the spur of the moment just to escape her mother's attempts to marry her off to Canis. I can't wait to see where this story goes. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you very much for this! You're so wonderfully detailed, which is extremely helpful. I wasn't sure about a few things in this chapter, starting with Helen's odd reaction to marriage and men in general, as well as her relationship with her parents, which could be too cliched, especially in comparison to other Blacks (that family seems to have trouble in that sense :P). That the conversations and reactions were natural means a lot and I'm so pleased that you thought so. ^_^

Even better is that the chapter played out like a movie. I think I've written this chapter at least three times so far, but I must be improving on it each time for it to be that good. :D

Thank you so much for your reviews! ^_^ I really appreciate hearing from you!

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